August 21, 2005

Meltdown

The day was hot, but there was ice in my veins. In a mere moment, I had gone from well to ill. Two metallic, clinical words scribbled in a chart. Never again would I be fine; I would forever divide my life into the Before and the After.
[This has been a submission for Flash Fiction Friday at Purgatorian, in which jj supplies the first few words for a writing piece to be posted on your blog. Try it!]

11 comments:

yournamehere said...

Powerful.

Melody said...

Great intro! I'd love to read more.

BadGod said...

I hate metallic words!

Heather said...

Gave me goose bumps...

mr_g said...

Excellent start. What were the words...aluminum? steel? mickel? Sorry... Love the writing; I'm just a sarcastic insert-word-here... ;)

MoDigli said...

Ooooo..... NIiiice. So true how any kind of diagnosis divides a time before and a time after FOREVER!

I liked that!

JJ said...

"I'm admitting you"
"You're being laid off"
"I want a divorce"

Words that divide your life into before and after. Very good.

babyjewels said...

That was really good.

B.O.B.I. said...

"I just sharted."

Now THAT'S a Before and After!

Melliferous Pants said...

Excellent!

The Awful Writer said...

Wow. That really captured a moment anyone would dread. Well done.